Here’s the 10 minute edit, credits and colour work will be done before it’s sent to Paris on Monday.
Three points to consider:
1. the title/font – The chalkboard font seems appropriate for the themes, any thoughts?
2. a couple of cuts – Adi having paper thrown at him, and the joke about the metal sharpener. The sharpener joke didn’t seem to make sense without including the impressions of the teachers first, and there is quite a lot in the staff room scene anyway. With the paper being thrown in detention, perhaps its better to hold off from this – Adi gets things thrown at him at two other points, and I think it is also good to build up slowly to the bad behaviour, rather than as soon as the teacher leaves the room.
3. ‘The Real’ – any comments on this will be be really useful.
Is it presented too much as a series of quick shots? should it be less shots that are held for longer (allowing more ‘reality’ to be seen)?
Keeping it all outside in the playground hopefully adds to the contrast.
the last shot of the good group merging into reality seems a bit more subtle than the teacher telling them to get inside – any thought?